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如果是我，我会说 IN A CHILD‘S LIFE。
Do you think they are the best teachers in our lives? My answer is no. They are the earliest teacher in our lives but not the best teacher.
为什么用问句？显得底气不太足。我会直截了当地说，尽管如此，他们并不是最好的老师。
First, Parents' knowledge is limited by many factors, such as major, education, interesting and so on.
有点像中文。而且，这一段的立意不好。家长的知识是有限的，任何学校任何老师的知识也是有限的。你没有对两者的区别进行比较。
With the social developing, people's jobs become more different than before, no one can know everything in all kinds of fields. My father is a very good dentist. He knows a lot of knowledge about teeth, but he hasn’t any knowledge about computer. Even he can learn some thing and then teach me, he still be short on mathematics that is a very necessary background for computer engineering.
Second, parents didn't get good training that the teacher's did. As a good teacher, he will learn a lot of knowledge then he can know how to guide children's interesting, how to encourage children and how to correct children's mistakes without hurting their feeling. I am sure many parents have not that kind of knowledge and patient.
KNOWLEDGE这个词重复太多。也许这样说更好些：THEY ARE SPECIALLLY TRAINED IN PROPER WAYS TO GUIDE A CHILD’S INTEREST，BUILDING UP A CHILD‘S CONFIDENCE，AND FINE TUNING THEIR BEHAVIOURS。
Third, parents love their children too deep to judge their children's behavior correctly. When I was learning how to play piano, my mother thought I was very tired and it is too hard for me. When I wanted to give up, she didn't push me and just let me do what I want. The result is my friends who studied piano with me can play piano very well, and I forgot everything.
纵容，放纵，LET GO，SPOIL，PRESSURE等等。这些词得用上啊。PUSH不是一个好词。
As all of reasons （OVER ALL）I think parents are not the best teachers for us（ARE YOU A KID？）. But parents are the most important teachers for us in the beginning of our lives（这一点不是此文的结论）. Their behavior help children built their personalities for their whole lives. （这一点也不是。应该把中心放在最后。如学校的老师才是真正的老师）更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net
如果是我，我会说 IN A CHILD‘S LIFE。
Do you think they are the best teachers in our lives? My answer is no. They are the earliest teacher in our lives but not the best teacher.
为什么用问句？显得底气不太足。我会直截了当地说，尽管如此，他们并不是最好的老师。
First, Parents' knowledge is limited by many factors, such as major, education, interesting and so on.
有点像中文。而且，这一段的立意不好。家长的知识是有限的，任何学校任何老师的知识也是有限的。你没有对两者的区别进行比较。
With the social developing, people's jobs become more different than before, no one can know everything in all kinds of fields. My father is a very good dentist. He knows a lot of knowledge about teeth, but he hasn’t any knowledge about computer. Even he can learn some thing and then teach me, he still be short on mathematics that is a very necessary background for computer engineering.
Second, parents didn't get good training that the teacher's did. As a good teacher, he will learn a lot of knowledge then he can know how to guide children's interesting, how to encourage children and how to correct children's mistakes without hurting their feeling. I am sure many parents have not that kind of knowledge and patient.
KNOWLEDGE这个词重复太多。也许这样说更好些：THEY ARE SPECIALLLY TRAINED IN PROPER WAYS TO GUIDE A CHILD’S INTEREST，BUILDING UP A CHILD‘S CONFIDENCE，AND FINE TUNING THEIR BEHAVIOURS。
Third, parents love their children too deep to judge their children's behavior correctly. When I was learning how to play piano, my mother thought I was very tired and it is too hard for me. When I wanted to give up, she didn't push me and just let me do what I want. The result is my friends who studied piano with me can play piano very well, and I forgot everything.
纵容，放纵，LET GO，SPOIL，PRESSURE等等。这些词得用上啊。PUSH不是一个好词。
As all of reasons （OVER ALL）I think parents are not the best teachers for us（ARE YOU A KID？）. But parents are the most important teachers for us in the beginning of our lives（这一点不是此文的结论）. Their behavior help children built their personalities for their whole lives. （这一点也不是。应该把中心放在最后。如学校的老师才是真正的老师）更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net